In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

People from some parts of the world have different views about whether a great amount of funding should be taken for railway construction between cities or for present public transport improvement. While it really helps to meet people's wants if getting newer and faster trains, I believe that reaching people's needs with higher quality of public transportation seems to be quite more pressing and
necessary
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necessity
. On the one hand, an extended railway system brings a good convenience to people. When someone like travellers needs to choose a traffic tool to get to another
city
, trains which have routes that are corresponding to their plans can not only save the costs on travel compared to other means of transportation, but reduce the time wasted on the way. From a commuter's point of view, trains with higher speed between cities make it possible for job seekers
to consider
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consider
job opportunities outside the
city
they are living since the distance barrier can be moderately removed and no longer be
such
a serious problem. It can
therefore
be argued that the
fulfillment
a feeling of satisfaction at having achieved your desires
fulfilment
of people's expectations to more convenient lives is a reflection of
the stronger
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the strong
connection between cities.
On the other hand
, I think what we cannot overlook is the needs of a society. It is a fact that people within a
city
are always faced with a series of problems in terms of public transportation in existence,
such
as the obsolescence of facilities, the sudden outage or delay during peak time, inadequate routes and high fares. For
this
reason, practical solutions taken to strengthen infrastructure development
is seen
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are seen
as an urge on effectiveness, which improves people's living standard
consequently
. Since public transport
is
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has been
already a part of daily life, people basic benefits are linked to that and there are a bigger range of people being able to take
advantages
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advantage
of improved service when governments do take steps. In conclusion, I can understand the extension of the railway system involved with
city
connection allows some people attain unprecedented shortcuts in time and distance, but it seems to me that feasible measures focusing on satisfying people's needs of public transport
is
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are
much more desirable in a
city
.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • In conclusion
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