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Some people say that success is '10 percent talent and 90 percent hard work' Is hard work is the key to success, or is talent also important?

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There are many people want to be successful in the world. They always show their
talent
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 in the public. Many people's opinions show that people reckon that
talent
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 is the main key to
success
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, but in my opinion hard-working is the main key to
success
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. My opinion is if you have
talent
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, but you do not
work
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 hard you can not show your real
talent
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 to the world, so I agree that '
success
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 is 10 percent
talent
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 and 90 percent hard
work
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' In our life, there exist tons of ways or formula to be successful in every different
person
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's mind. There is no right formula for
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, but almost all well-known famous people have one formula to achieve their
success
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 is they tried to
work
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 hard in their own way, they knew that if they not word hard they would not be successful like right now. In reality, Elon Musk,
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 worldwide famous billionaire he is a talented
person
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, but he works hard for his company Tesla, about 100 hours per week, so that he can keep Tesla working properly, in that situation his
talent
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 are not the only key to Elon Musk
success
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, but is the key for his company to be one of the largest electricity car manufacturers in the US. Other successful
person
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 like Jeff Bezos
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 works hard in his path to be the world's richest man. People have good skills in some activities like singing or math,
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 the natural-born talents, each
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 have one of that. I could help you outstanding in your activity with others, but you have a desire to be an outstanding
person
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 you need to choose your path,
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 start to
work
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 hard on it, never give up with difficulties you will get what you desire. Only hard-working people can never fade out of people's mind. There are a group famous people that they cannot achieve their own
success
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 by just talented and hard-working, but they are famous for their strange activity, the outside, or they made a trend on the internet. The popularity of the internet makes people famous quicker than ever, but their fame did not
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 long, without hard-working or real
talent
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 you can't be a true famous
person
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, there is no only luck
success
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. People can be a
success
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 with only
talent
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, but people can only be long-lasting famous with their hard-working, when people
work
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 hard their
success
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 path is way shorter.
Success
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 from luck can not be the ways of legends, hard-working is the way of legendary people.

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