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Some people think that secondary or high school students should be taught how to use money management as it is an important life skill. Do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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Financial
management
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 is crucial topic in
life
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, and when it comes to teaching
money
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management
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 to younger age people it gets more significant. I totally believe it is advantageous for people to learn
money
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management
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 in younger ages.
This
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 essay provides some reasons to prove
this
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 assumption.
Firstly
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, people are capable to make better decisions for leading
life
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 and career if they learn and practice
money
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management
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 in younger ages.
B
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esides while
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Besides, while
they learn financial
management
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, it gives them a broader horizon in many f
ields
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fields, for
for instance
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 setting
life
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 goals and choosing j
ob.
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a job
jobs
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lso it
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Also, it
is efficient f
or
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in
motivating them to be more productive and consistent in following their education and
life
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 goals. İn addition, when people learn financial
management
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 earlier, it c
uase
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causes
cause
cease
them to start saving.
This
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 way, they will have a saving
instead
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 of spending their capital for childhood and maybe not u
sefull
being of use or service
useful
activities,
s
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,
o they w
il
the capability of conscious choice and decision and intention
will
be capable to start
life
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 smoother when they start to live independently.
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, from the aspect of prevention from unsuitable hobbies and a
ctivities it
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activities, it
is a
dvantegous
giving an advantage
advantageous
advantages
too. İn todays world young generation is faced so many attracting and s
timulating but
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stimulating, but
not u
sefull
being of use or service
useful
hobbies, which in some c
ases even are
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cases are even
harmful for them.
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 a statics about the
money
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 that has s
pended
depleted of energy, force, or strength
spent
for video games by adolescences can clarify the importance of
money
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 young people
money
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 m
anagemen.
the act of managing something
management
 To conclude, i
mportance
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the importance
of financial m
anagment
the act of managing something
management
in
life
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 is so obvious and when people start to learn and engage it in their
life
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 since their y
ounger age it
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younger age, it
will be much beneficial for them.

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