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Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility into University difficult. Do you agree or disagree?

#accessibility #university
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People from different monetary background find it difficult to access to university. As per my opinion,
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 statement is partially correct, I will share both of my viewpoints, in the following paragraphs. I believe there are numerous universities, where
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 is not based on the financial status of the students.
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, they give
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 to only those students who have scored the required percentage in the entrance exam.
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, criteria to get
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 to the recognised colleges are marks achieved by an individual in High School.
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, there are many universities, which are ready to give a full scholarship to talented students who
can not
can not
cannot
 afford to pay their fees but have genius brains and wish to succeed. The Government
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also support
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also supports
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 initiatives because providing education to a person from a low-income family helps in contributing to economic growth. Some universities give preference to the students, who are affluent. The main reason for
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, institutes need funds to operate.
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 based on finance gives an undue advantage to the rich people and there are many poor people who deprive to get
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 into good colleges due to lack of money irrespective of how good they are on studies. To conclude, there are various universities, where students can get
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 based on the merit list irrespective of their financial status,
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, there are many colleges wherein
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 is difficult for a person from a poor background. I think the government should provide subsidiaries to those colleges so that
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 will not be based on the monetary term.

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