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It is now possible for scientists and tourists to travel to remote natural environment, such as the South Pole. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is true that humans can now set foot in wild regions far away from civilisation. While I accept that
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 development can have certain benefits for the human race, I believe that it is likely to have a harmful impact on nature. On the one hand, undertaking expeditions to the wilderness can be valuable in terms of both science and recreation. There are a considerable number of undiscovered secrets that can be tremendously useful for researchers to conduct their studies.
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, environmental scientists can analyse the data about the thickness of ice layers over millions of years in both hemispheres to predict the possible changes in global temperatures.
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 findings are crucial for the governments to develop appropriate plans to alleviate global warming.
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, the untouched beauty of these areas is usually appealing to travellers, providing people with an attractive option of holiday destination or excursion.
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, I would argue that these positive aspects are outweighed by the drawbacks. When people are given full and easy access to the distant and
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 areas, there are likely to be more moving there to reside or start their business. It has been shown that substantial damage has been done to
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 as massive deforestation or water contamination due to humans’ lack of environmental awareness. If there is inadequate protection of the environment
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 type of action, wild regions in the world will no longer exist, unspeakably affecting not only the overall ecology but
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 the lives of other people. In conclusion, it seems to me that the potential dangers of travelling to wild environments
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 more significant than the possible benefits for the mentioned reasons.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remote natural environment
  • scientific research
  • climate change
  • environmental preservation
  • economic benefits
  • conservation efforts
  • habitat disruption
  • pollution
  • cultural disruption
  • indigenous populations
  • commercialization
  • safety risks
  • personal enrichment
  • ecosystems
  • awareness
  • appreciation for nature
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