Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility into university difficult. Do you agree or disagree?

#accessibility #university

Currently, the discourse regarding

enrollment

into

university

Suggestion

the university

is increasingly topical. Some people contend that low

income

and high

income

students cannot afford higher

education

Although

I strongly disagree with the idea mentioned because of its

academics

Suggestion

academic's

academic

impact, the

university

should ensure the low economic

income

students can afford

university

through

scholarships program

Suggestion

a scholarship program

scholarship program

scholarship programs

the scholarship program

. One of the vital arguments

for every

Accept comma addition

for, every

students

Suggestion

student

can afford college is its the requirement to

enroll

enrol

university

is based from academic merits.

This

is because, in

this

issue, since academic merits can be

use

Suggestion

used

to considerate the appropriateness of prospective students.

University

Suggestion

The university

can determine the candidate objectively. Gadjah Mada

University

Suggestion

excellent example for

this

; around 5.000 undergraduate students who accepted from

various test entrance

Suggestion

the various test entrance

mostly come from different economic background.

Therefore

, regardless of each

students

Suggestion

student's

condition, every

individuals

Suggestion

individual

have

Suggestion

has

Suggestion

equal opportunity to afford higher

education

through their academic potentials.

However

, the idea

can be backfire

Suggestion

can backfire

university

Suggestion

the university

cannot develop the

scholarships

Suggestion

scholarship

program for low

income

students properly.

In other words

, even though poor students can able to enter

university

Suggestion

the university

through their achievement.

Suggestion

some points, if they cannot afford scholarship, the students face some difficulties

such

as cannot pay the

tuiton

a fee paid for instruction (especially for higher education)

tuition

fee regularly and should rely on part-time working.

This

is illustrated by a recent study by Stanford

University

finding

this

type of cases in several regions in the Indonesia and adverse academic record of the students. For that reason, to make higher

education

more affordable for everyone,

university

Suggestion

the university

should assess the number of low

income

students more

specfic

(sometimes followed by 'to') applying to or characterized by or distinguishing something particular or special or unique

specific

in order to provide the scholarships fairly. To conclude, considering the benefits of requirement through academic merits, its highly reasonable that higher

education

can reach out any student that come from different

economy

Suggestion

economic

background.

Nevertheless

, to keep

poor student

Suggestion

the poor student

can afford higher

education

university

Suggestion

the university

should make an effort to develop scholarship program.

Submitted by anandarzky on Sun Sep 01 2019

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

Paragraph 1 - Introduction

Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Do you want to check your IELTS essays?

Submit unlimited essays, letters and charts. Sign up right now and start improving your writing skills.

7Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
26Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

308 words

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

4.5
band
(Task 1): The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram below shows the plans for Porth Harbour in 2000 compared to the outline of it today.
7.5
band
Some people think that sending criminals to prison is not effective. Education and job training should be used instead. Do you agree or disagree?
In several nations, imprisonment is witnessed as a better solution to deter crimes, but other people strongly advocate that education systems and job training are needed to prevent lawless cases. I partly agree with both viewpoints. The following paragraphs will highlight my personal perspective.
6
band
You have been working in a company for three years, but now wish to leaving job. Write a letter to the manager of the company. In your letter: • What have you learned while working for the company • Did you enjoyed working there • What are your reasons for leaving the job
I hope this email finds you in radiant health and you are doing well. I’m writing to you to give information about my resignation I have decided recently
5
band
You have recently ordered an item from the internet, but are not happy with the purchase. Write to the company. In your letter •Describe what you purchased •Explain why you are not happy with the purchase •Tell them what you would like them to do about the situation
I'm writing to complain about the other item from the internet, but are not happy with the purchase. I bought some shoes but it is not the same on the Internet.
8
band
Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
In the modern world, students are forced to attend many compulsory classes. They are believed to invest much time and effort in learning Science and Technology because they are considered to be more vital and essential than History. In my opinion, both have their importance for some reasons mentioned in the essay.

Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility into university difficult. Do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

(Task 1): The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Some people think that sending criminals to prison is not effective. Education and job training should be used instead. Do you agree or disagree?

You have been working in a company for three years, but now wish to leaving job. Write a letter to the manager of the company. In your letter: • What have you learned while working for the company • Did you enjoyed working there • What are your reasons for leaving the job

You have recently ordered an item from the internet, but are not happy with the purchase. Write to the company. In your letter •Describe what you purchased •Explain why you are not happy with the purchase •Tell them what you would like them to do about the situation

Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.