Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility into university difficult. Do you agree or disagree?

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Currently, the discourse regarding

enrollment

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into

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university

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the university

is increasingly topical. Some people contend that low

income

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and high

income

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students cannot afford higher

education

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I strongly disagree with the idea mentioned because of its

academics

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academic's

academic

impact, the

university

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should ensure the low economic

income

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students can afford

university

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through

scholarships program

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a scholarship program

scholarship program

scholarship programs

the scholarship program

. One of the vital arguments

for every

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for, every

students

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student

can afford college is its the requirement to

enroll

enrol

university

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is based from academic merits.

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is because, in

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issue, since academic merits can be

use

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used

to considerate the appropriateness of prospective students.

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The university

can determine the candidate objectively. Gadjah Mada

University

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excellent example for

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; around 5.000 undergraduate students who accepted from

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the various test entrance

mostly come from different economic background.

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, regardless of each

students

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student's

condition, every

individuals

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individual

have

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has

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equal opportunity to afford higher

education

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through their academic potentials.

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, the idea

can be backfire

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can backfire

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university

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the university

cannot develop the

scholarships

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scholarship

program for low

income

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students properly.

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, even though poor students can able to enter

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university

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the university

through their achievement.

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some points, if they cannot afford scholarship, the students face some difficulties

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as cannot pay the

tuiton

a fee paid for instruction (especially for higher education)

tuition

fee regularly and should rely on part-time working.

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is illustrated by a recent study by Stanford

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finding

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type of cases in several regions in the Indonesia and adverse academic record of the students. For that reason, to make higher

education

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more affordable for everyone,

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university

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the university

should assess the number of low

income

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students more

specfic

(sometimes followed by 'to') applying to or characterized by or distinguishing something particular or special or unique

specific

in order to provide the scholarships fairly. To conclude, considering the benefits of requirement through academic merits, its highly reasonable that higher

education

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can reach out any student that come from different

economy

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economic

background.

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, to keep

poor student

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the poor student

can afford higher

education

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university

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the university

should make an effort to develop scholarship program.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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308 words

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