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Some people say that the Internet is bringing people together by making the world smaller. To what extent do you agree that the Internet is making it easier for people to communicate with one another?

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Technology
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 has changed the way people communicate with each other. With
cutting-edge invention
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the cutting - edge invention
 in
technology
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, especially in social media, according to some people, we are more connected than ever while others argue that it is making people anti-social. It has made lives easier yet taken out the aspect of physical presence which was essential to communicate with another person in the past.
Technology
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 has opened new avenues in the way we communicate with another person situated anywhere on the globe. It has enabled us to connect and share information with people irrespective of their location.
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 advancement in
technology
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 makes it easier for us to find and befriend like-minded people. Each new method
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 developed
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 gives us the option to choose the level of intimacy and frequency of our communication with another person. In my opinion,
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 growth can make people feel socially active and more willing to engage in conversation with new people.
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,
technology
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 takes away the physical aspect of communication.
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 limitation can make people feel an absence of the human touch and can take away from the clarity of a message. Communicating through messaging or phone can only go as far as getting the words across. We human beings are social animals and need to connect with other beings in their physical form in order to feel a deep connection. One always has the option to ignore social interactions online, but it’s harder to do that in real life. I feel that
technology
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 doesn’t allow for
deep
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deeper
 connections to be built because of the above limitations. To summarize,
technology
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 can be used to build
newer
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new
 connections at one’s own comfort and
pace
the state prevailing during the absence of war
peace
, but its limitations don’t allow for deep lifelong relationships to blossom.
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