In the 20th century, contact between many different parts of the world has developed rapidly through air travel and telecommunications. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?
In the modern world connections between various parts of the world have enhanced rapidly through
air
travel
and long-distance communications. One of the benefits is doing tasks and making connections much faster and another positive point is the convenient way to make connections, on the other hand
, environmental issues and the high cost
of travel
are negative points
of this
topic, but in my opinion, the benefits outweigh the negative points
.
With developing technology environmental issues have been bold and governments are concerned about this
topic and transportation facilities are one of these reasons. Air
travel
is done by plane
uses a huge amount of fuel and it leads to pollution. In other words
, by utilizing fossil fuels, planes make carbon dioxide and other harmful components. Another disadvantage of that is
the cost
of travelling. Air
travel
by plane
is the fastest way to movement and because of that, the cost
of travelling by facilitation is so high that many people
can not afford that. For instance
, in Iran, many people
would rather travel
by bus instead
of plane
because the cost
of ticket of plane
is much higher.
On the other hand
, these kinds of transportation have important positive points
. In the past, people
had to be transported by horse or in the best condition by vehicles which led to tiredness. It means, people
now have more comfortable options in comparison with the past. Also
, in modern days, individuals encounter hectic lives and they do not have enough time to do all scheduled tasks. These types of travelling prevent waste of time due to
faster speed. For example
, in the third decade of Iran, people
who wanted to travel
from Ahvaz to Tehran had to use cars or buses which took long about 14 hours,but now they can be transported by plane
just in an hour. It is clear that
the advantages of these features are stronger than their disadvantages.
In conclusion, telecommunication and air
travel
make transportation much faster and more convenient, although
these features have disadvantages like pollution and the high cost
of travelling, in my opinion, the positive points
outweigh the negative points
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