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STUDENTS SHOULD BE TAUGHT ACADEMIC KNOWLEDGE SO THAT THEY CAN PASS EXAMS, AND SKILLS SUCH AS COOKING OR DRESSING SHOULD NOT BE TAUGHT. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE/DISAGREE?

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Academic knowledge is very important for students for clearing their exams, but the training of a variety of skills is
also
 important for succeeding in life.
For instance
, cooking or dressing, these skills
also
 play a vital role in their life. It could be argued that apart from the academic knowledge students should not be taught any other skills, for which I do not agree. Studies are very important at the time of school and college. Teaching them about all the subjects is crucial to pass the examination,
that is
 how children move forward. Skills
such
 as cooking or dressing should
also
 be taught in school which might help them to grow in general. Cooking and fashion are the hobbies of many people,
this
 should never me ignored and always kept in mind. Learning how to cook can help the kids to survive independently.
Similarly
, personality development classes should
also
 be taught at the same time. When they are trained about the dressing sense children become more confident and
therefore
, it makes them look decent and vogue. The teachers should promote extracurricular activities that will automatically multiply their skills. Educational institutes should focus on teaching the students about the academic knowledge, along with cooking and dressing manners. In my opinion,
this
 will broaden their mindset as well as they will excel in life. Books widen the horizon of career options, but learning other skills
also
 gives a person a large amount of opportunities in future.
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