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8) Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment, but population and education as well. • What problems will your country face in the next ten years? • How can these problems be overcome

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Globalisation is affecting the lives of the people all over the world, some of which are irreversible. India is a developing economy
,
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,
therefore
, struggling to overcome
lot
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lots
 of problems.
This
 essay will illustrate problems India will go to face in the upcoming 10 years and how steps can be taken to overcome them.
To begin
 with, there are lots of problems prevailing in our
country
, but we will
going
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go
 to discuss the most challenging ones.
Firstly
, environmental issues are consistently increasing day by day and require immediate action. The way temperature is increasing worldwide is scary and affecting lives of
lot
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a lot
lots
 of people. Increase in number of vehicles and other polluting factories operating with fossil fuels resulting in globalisation.
Secondly
, change in the agricultural methods in our
country
 and the farmers are deviated from the natural farming. Increase in the use of pesticides and insecticides
result
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results
 in polluting the land as well as food.
Lastly
, percentage of
population
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the population
 who are unemployed in the
country
 is on the rise. Every year, 2 million students graduate from their colleges and only 20% of them are getting jobs. Those who are talented prefer taking employment in other countries because of the better opportunities and work culture
.
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.
Hence
, resulting in brain drain which is another biggest setback of any developing
country
. To sum up, youngsters should join hands and help the government to overcome these problems as soon as possible.
Also
, it’s not only government
responsibility but
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responsibility, but
 everyone should take responsibility. Solar energy should be given preference over other sources of energy. Another feasible solution is to plant more trees and reduce usage of plastic and other non recyclable products.
Also
, organic farming need to be
encourage
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encouraged
 in order to give nutritious and healthy food to everyone. We can overcome any problem by joining hands together.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainability
  • Ecosystem
  • Renewable resources
  • Urbanization
  • Demographics
  • Healthcare system
  • Pension crisis
  • Curriculum development
  • Digital literacy
  • E-learning platforms
  • Lifelong learning
  • Public policy
  • Biodiversity conservation
  • Green technology
  • Population density
  • Generational equity
  • Economic disparity
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