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Stress is now a major problem in many countries around the world. What are some of the factors in modern society that cause this stress, and how can we reduce it?

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One of the most conspicuous trend of today's world is a
clossal
so great in size or force or extent as to elicit awe
colossal
 upsurge in the anxiety level among people. There
are
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is
 a wide range of factors that account for why
this
happing
come to pass
happen
. In my opinion,
this
 situation can be remedied provided that some effective measures are taken. There are
myraid
too numerous to be counted
myriad
 of consequences associated with
this
 soaring concern. Unlike
everday
found in the ordinary course of events
everyday
 problem which can be dealt with ease, which is extremely perilous can lead to more anxiousness
also
 it impact our health and relations. Thanks to the
aforemation
a message received and understood
information
predica
. It is not only
people but
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people, but
also
society
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a society
 which can suffer immensely. Steps to deal with
this
 problem are many, but the most effective one is that precautions ought to be
consider
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considered
firstly
, it engulf naturopathy and more assistant of psychological therapy with
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 which can be prevented
upto
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a greater
 extent. Beside, international
organizational
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organizations
 and local authorities should take necessary initiatives
cummutively
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cognizance
cognitively
cognisance
. Only when convergent steps from all the sector all
ensured
covered by insurance
insured
, can we expect to see a considerable
progess
gradual improvement or growth or development
progress
 in curbing the issue.
Hence
, it is apparent how society benefits astronomically. Dealing with stress is one of the most prevalent
problem
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problems
 that faces almost all parts of the world today concrete steps as discussed above, can effectively strengthen the fight against and alleviating
this
 growing concern.
Beside
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Besides
, its potential impact on society is
for
to a considerable degree; very much
far
 reaching indeed.

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