The charts below show the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The first chart explains why some
people
choose
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a bicycle
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bicycle
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bicycles
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to travel to
work
.
Conversely
,
second
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chart illustrates some reasons why they prefer
car
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to go to
work
.
Overall
,
people
who prefer bicycles to
work
are mostly concerned about fitness, health and pollution.
However
, comfort is the main
reason
why
people
use
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the car
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car
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for travel during
work
. A little
also
consider
car
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, as it is safer than cycling. Health and fitness are one of the main reasons why
people
prefer
cycle
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.
Along with
this
30% of the
people
also
think about pollution and use bicycles.
Next
, 15% of the
people
consider No parking as the main
reason
while
using cars. 13% think that cycling involves no costs and
last
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12% think that cycling is much faster than driving a
car
.
In contrast
, comfort is the prime
reason
why 40%
people
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drive. 21% of the
people
who
work
far from their home
uses
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car
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. Faster than cycling and carrying things to
work
is the primary
reason
for 28% of
people
, 14% each respectively.
Finally
, 11% assume that driving is safer compared to cycling.
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