People are shifting their residence to foreign countries .what are the advantages and disadvantages of thin trend?

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It is observed nowadays that many people shift their living place to foreign nations.
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living in western countries
have
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has
many advantages
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yet l believe that
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trend has some negative outcomes. On the one hand, there are several advantages of living in abroad.
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, when people live in foreign countries, they can get
better education
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a better education
from schools and universities due to
international study method
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the international study method
and best teachers.
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, in foreign nations people can enjoy more facilities which lead them to live
comfortable life
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a comfortable life
comfortable lives
the comfortable life
.
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if people live in
foreign country
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a foreign country, then
a foreign country then
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they have full day
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hospital facilities
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Lastly
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because of less crime
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people migrate to abroad as there is much security for society.
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, there are some negative outcomes of living in
foreign state
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a foreign state
foreign states
the foreign state
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preceding all others in time or space or degree
First
of all, when people start living in other
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places, then
then
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many times they do not have much knowledge about that area due to
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they may face many difficulties.
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, if a person
shift
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shifts
their home to
foreign country
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a foreign country, then
a foreign country then
foreign countries then
then
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sometimes one cannot communicate easily with other neighbours by which one has to live alone.
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lastly
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Lastly
, many people
do not know
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does not know
about
rules
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the rules
and regulations of other
countries
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countries, then
then
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sometimes they can disobey the rules by which they can be punished by government. In conclusion,
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even though
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living
in abroad has
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abroad has
many
advantages but
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advantages, but
it
also
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has demerits.

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