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Some people think that professionals such as doctors or engineers should be required to work in their home country. Others think that they should be free to work in another country. Discuss both views and give your opinion

In today's world, some skilled professions,
such
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 as
doctors
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 or engineers are important for the development of a
nation
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.
While
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 some argue that working in native country by
doctors
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 and engineers is required for betterment of their own country, other believe that they are not bind to work in their own
nation
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, they are free to do job, where they want to do.
This
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 essay will explore both perspectives and give my opinion with some detailed reasons. One the one hand, there are number of benefits to the
nation
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, if
doctors
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 or engineers do job in their own
nation
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instead
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 migrate other country for job.
Firstly
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, it has been seen that in some highly populated
countries
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, the number of
doctors
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 are less over the dense population,
as a result
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, most of the people do not get treatment for their diseases.
Therefore
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,it is neccessery for
doctors
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 to stay in their native
nation
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.
Moreover
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, these professions are highly paid, and that helps a
nation
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 in economically terms.
In other words
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,
this
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 means that, in many
countries
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 are not able to cure some of diseases, so people of those nations go to other nations where highly qualified
doctors
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 are available and the spend huge money for their treatments.
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, nowadays, Turkey has became the hub of the skin care or nose surgery
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 expert surgeons.
On the other hand
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, in
this
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 current world , everyone has right to choosen their woking place where ever they want to persue their career. To be more specific, these jobs takes lot of dedication and hardwork during graduation,
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 the tution fees are high of these courses, because of that there should be no compultion for these professions.
Furthermore
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, in many
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 have not better opportunities for these jobs, in
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 they have to migrate in other well-developed
countries
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 for their bright future. In conclusion,
although
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 working in the motherland can be beneficial for people, traveling to other
countries
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 can broaden their minds to find better solutions for all difficulties they face. I suggest that all specialists maintain their contact with their
countries
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 after migration to share more ideas with them.

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organization
Plan before writing. Make a clear plan: intro, two body parts, then a clear end.
development
Keep ideas simple and add one or two clear facts or examples for each idea.
coherence
Use linking words to show order and contrast: On the one hand, On the other hand, Also, Therefore.
grammar
Watch long sentences. Use short, simple sentences to be clear.
lexical
Check spelling and word use. Use common words and avoid hard words that are new.
content
The essay talks about both views and has a clear view in the end.
structure
There is a proper shape: intro, body, and conclusion.
coherence
The writer uses words to link ideas at times.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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