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The restoration of old buildings in major cities around the world costs enormous amounts of money. This money would be better spent on providing new housing and road development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, a significant amount of money is spent on the maintenance of old structures in many cities. Some people believe that the same amount may be utilized for other
infrastructure
 projects
instead
 of the above. I disagree with
this
 view. In
this
 essay, I shall explain why the budget to be spent for preserving and maintaining old buildings and monuments of cities should not be curtailed. The
road side
edge of a way or road or path
roadside
 buildings in
old
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older
 cities are usually stone structures that represent the culture and heritage of that place. Many of them are in poor condition. Even so, in my opinion, they should be restored because these buildings are strongly attached to the history of the
city
. If they are demolished, a part of the history will
also
 die out and it is a national loss.
On the other hand
, maintaining buildings of historical value in good condition is a great way to bring tourism to the
city
. The tourism generates new employment opportunities and revenue. A part of
this
 revenue may be utilized for new
infrastructure
 projects like better highway connectivity, new housing schemes etc. These
infrastructure
 projects may
also
 provide a hassle-free experience
to
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of
 the
city
 tourists.
For example
, good metro train connectivity to the oldest part of
heavily populated
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a heavily populated city
city
 will ensure better
infrastructure
 and it will promote tourism as well. Having said that, those buildings that are beyond repair should definitely be demolished and new structures should be built in their place. Allowing them to stay in their dilapidated state poses serious threat to life and property. To conclude, old structures and monuments tell us about the history and time-journey of the
city
. Their maintenance and preservation shall enhance the reputation of the
city
 and create employment opportunities and revenue. Even so, buildings that cannot be restored should be destroyed.
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