Smacking children is the best form of discipline. To what extent do you agree?

All children misbehave and every parent face the challenge of how to discipline his or her child.Owing to
this
,
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,
it has been suggested that physical punishment is the ultimate way of correcting children.While
this
may be adopted
,
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,
I totally disagree with
this
viewpoint.
To begin
with, corporal punishment
have been attributed
Suggestion
has been attributed
to low self esteem in children.
This
is because they live in fear of being spanked at every slight mistake and assume they are not good enough and
this
translate to their relationship with their equals in the society.
Secondly
, children who suffer beating grow up and see it as a way of life.
Thus they
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Thus, they
become violent without even noticing and eventually turn to crime in later life.
For
example my
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example, my
cousin was rude in his formative years and his mother always flogged him, today he is a notorious criminal wanted by the police.
Finally
, hitting youngsters can result in injuries.
This
is because most parents get swallowed up in anger when they perceive misconduct from their
offpring
the immediate descendants of a person
offspring
and in an attempt to correct them, they lay their hands on anything without minding if
this
would lead to severe laceration or even death.
However
, smacking kids may instill fear in them in early life so they may become wary of committing a future havoc and can totally desist from bad behaviour.
This
however
is a small group In conclusion, while people may vary in their opinion
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I completely disagree that corporal punishment is the surest way to train a child to be morally upright.I rather suggest positive reinforcement, withdrawal of privileges and time out for advice as effective measures
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