Some governments spend a lot of public money training up individuals to be successful in international sporting events. Some people believe that this money should be spent on things that will benefit the general public instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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To send a few persons for international sports occasions, some governments use a large sum of public revenue to train them.
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,
this
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essay agrees that
this
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public
money
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should be used
first
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to provide safe drinking
water
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to
general public
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the general public
and health care facilities before considering to spend
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money
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on sport persons for their
traings
activity leading to skilled behavior
trainings
trains
drawings
. Rather than spending a lot of cash to train some people
for
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in
international sports, it ought to be
first
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spend on providing clean drinking
water
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to citizens of a country which is the
first
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and foremost responsibility of any
government
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.
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,
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,
as a result
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of drinking clean
water
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less persons will fall sick. A nation who has healthy citizens is a
healthy
having an abundant supply of money or possessions of value
wealthy
country.
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, in The Times of India, it was published that from 2010- 2015 Indian
government
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had spent 60% of sport quota
money
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on general public under the campaign 'India Drinks Vlwan
Water
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'.
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, a gov8hsould educate each individual by providing
facility
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the facility
of education so that literacy rate should be decreased from that nation.As an educated person thinks and lives
better
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the good
life compared to illiterate and does contribute in
government
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income in the form of a tax which raises
government
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revenue.
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, more revenue means
nation
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the nation
is
flourishing more
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more flourishing
.
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, in a recent survey done in Australia, it is shown that
literacy rate
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the literacy rate
is gone
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was gone
up from 75 to 90% in the past 10 years as more
money
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is spent on education sector. To conclude,
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essay has explained that a
government
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should use income on the basic needs of the Citizens like safe drinking
water
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and education before using it for any other purpose like to provide training to sport people.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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