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Research shows that business meetings and training are happening online nowadays. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Business conferences and training are taking place more and more on online platforms, replacing the traditional face-to-face communication and information exchange.
This
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 has both benefits and drawbacks in equal measure The trend seen in
companies
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the companies
 switching their training activities and business discussions to the online mode has many advantages.
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 of all,
this
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 offers staff increased flexibility and full control of their timetable, which is likely to diminish the unnecessary high stress levels and
thus
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 boost their work productivity.
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, working mothers find
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 incredibly helpful for them to multitask between rearing their children and joining meetings to keep abreast of developments in the company.
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,
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 online mode of operation could help companies economize on expenditure by not having to pay for
electricity bill
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the electricity bill
electricity bills
, printed documents or equipment for carrying out the meeting or training procedures,
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On the other hand
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,
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 option has two major drawbacks.
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, communication via the internet can be a hindrance as there might be failures in the flow of information. To illustrate, in [country’s name] not many people can afford high-speed internet connection, and as a consequence, lagging connection or computer crashing can cause disruptions, reducing the comprehension among meeting or training participants.
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, there is little room for practice and the lack of direct guidance
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 prevents people from fully grasping the skills. It would be less productive because employees receiving training cannot apply what they are taught on the internet, or can be clumsy in their actual performance since there is no one to show them whether they are doing it the right way as reality is sometimes completely different from theory. In conclusion, while there are some advantages
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of
to
 staying at home and participating in discussions or training sessions, there are
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 disadvantages showing that both sides of
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 development should be carefully viewed.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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