The given pie charts compare the expenses in 7 different categories in 1966 and 1996 by American Citizens.Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below

The given pie charts compare the expenses in 7 different categories in 1966 and 1996 by American Citizens.Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below
The provided pie charts compare the proportion of seven different categories, food,
cars
, petrol, restaurants, furniture, computers and books, in the year
of
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1966 and 1996 by
American
Residents.
Overall
, Americans spent a large section of money on food in 1966.
By comparison
,
their
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majority expending
was
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were
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comprised of
cars
in 1996. In 1966,
American
Citizens spent 44%
for
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food, which was the largest sector of their expenditure. The
second
largest sector was
cars
that
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composed 23% of the total annual spending.
While
computers had only 1%, petrol had nearly one in ten (9%)
in
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the same time. Furniture had one in ten (10%); it was followed by restaurants, which had 7%,
while
the
third
were
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books, with 6%. In 1996, the composition of spending altered dramatically compared to that of 1966.
American
Citizens spent on
cars
constituted the largest section of the annual expenditure,
which
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more
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than
two fifths
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(45%). The percentage of
American
citizens spending on restaurants had doubled from 7% in 1966 to 14% in 1996. Spending on books was highest in 1966, at 6%.
By contrast
, there was no significant change in the proportions of petrol and furniture.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words cars, american with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.

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