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For the development oc whole nation,pupils should study wjatever they like .likewise,a good scirnce and technology is important to developec the nations. This essay will discuss both point of view.

As it is right that to
developed
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develop
 a
nation we
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nation, we
 pupils are the root for it and we all deserved to study what we
neef
require as useful, just, or proper
need
anf
in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
 have
interest
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 on it
.
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.
Most
oeple
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 think that students should study which things are useful in their future.They will be
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sucess
Suggestion
successful
success
 if they need a subject
relTed
being connected either logically or causally or by shared characteristics
related
 to science and technology.
Likewise
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 a famous scientist
also
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 believed in
such
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 scientific technology.These
is believe
Suggestion
are believed
of
Suggestion
by
 people in science and
technologg
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
technology
technologies
.
On the other hand
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,
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,
more than 70percent of people believe than nation will be
develop
Suggestion
developed
 if the pillars will be
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sucess
Suggestion
successful
success
that is
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 student will read
accordingly
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 their wish
.
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.
For instance
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;
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;
if my parents forced me to read subject in which
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 am not
intersted
having or showing interest; especially curiosity or fascination or concern
interested
intercepted
then
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 what will be the result?It is obvious that
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 will not scored good marks as my parents are expecting for me.So
,
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,
for proper and excellent result
,
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,
we have to focused on our
interest
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 and hobbies.I personally believed that
,
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,
hobbies are the most powerful weapons to be
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sucess
Suggestion
successful
success
successes
.So
,
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,
thjs
denotes a person or thing
this
 proves
thag
pointing out something
that
,
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,
hobbiesis
Suggestion
hobbies are
hobbies is
 another way of
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sucess
an event that accomplishes its intended purpose
success
.
Likewise
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,
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,
interested people can do all the struggles to be a
sucessful
having succeeded or being marked by a favorable outcome
successful
 person
.
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.
one
Suggestion
One
 of the
sucessful
having succeeded or being marked by a favorable outcome
successful
 people
know
Suggestion
knows
 about their
interest
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 and their
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sucess
an event that accomplishes its intended purpose
success
successes
sauces
.
For
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example if
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example, if
a
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an
 officer is not happy in his /her
work
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work, then
then
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 it
si
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
is
 impossible to be
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sucess
an event that accomplishes its intended purpose
success
 in his or her
interest
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.So
,
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,
for
this
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 reason, all university
stude
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studs
stud
 should
focused
Suggestion
focus
 on their will
nither
after a negative statement used to indicate that the next statement is similarly negative
neither
never
on
Suggestion
of
 their parents
interesr
to a complete degree or to the full or entire extent
entirely
. To sum up all schools
,
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,
university
shouls
give an exhibition of to an interested audience
shows
should
 focused on their
interest
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 and hobbies
niether
after a negative statement used to indicate that the next statement is similarly negative
neither
never
 on
ther
of them or themselves
their
other
the
 hobbies.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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