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Technology has a positive effect on education. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays,
technology
 has changed our lives.
Education
 is another area that has been influenced by it. Some people agree that it has an advantage effect on
education
, but some people think it does not. In
this
 essay I will give my opinion towards
this
 statement.
First
 of all, the
technology
 helps improving
education
. I agree with
this
 because it provides useful information for people. Students these days can look up for things that they do not know on the internet without having to wait for the teacher. Another example is that people who sick and cannot go to
school
 can still participate in classes.
For example
, my brother, he had cancer so he could not go to
school
,
however
,
school
 provided robot for him and
this
 robot can see what is on the board so my brother can still study even though he is at home.
Moreover
, it will be beneficial for students or graduates because
technology
 has been used widely in the society. If they know how to use in the very young ages,
then
 they will have more
self-esteem
Suggestion
Self-esteem
 and confidence to do the future tasks, whether it is working or studying.
However
,
technology
 is not always positive to the
education
. Students can easily distract by
technology
. Because they have an access to some websites, they can loss their concentration while they are in the class. The best way to prevent
this
 is to limit the usage of devices that can connect to the internet so that they can focus more on the tasks To conclude, I totally agree that
technology
 has positive effects on
education
 because it provides access for students who do not have chances to go to
school
.
However
, it needs to have a limit because students can use it for many purposes, schools need to restrict some websites that can distract the concentration of their students as well.
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