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Band 6.5

A Australian friend recently sent you a present by post. You want to thank him/her. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter -say how you felt when you received the present -describe what you like about it -explain how you will use the present

#australian #friend #post #-say #-describe #-explain
Dear Ahmad, Hope you're doing well.
Last
 Sunday, I received a gift parcel from you. It's
surprsing
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surprising
 for me because I was not accepted so early. I'm extremely happy to see
such
 a beautiful wristwatch. I know
this
 watch is very expensive and you spent a lot of money to buy. I don't have words to describe my feelings.
Although
 our friendship is beyond material things
and
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your attitude towards me is extraordinary.
Furthermore
, The watch is not only attractive in design but
also
 has many moods, which make it unique from other watches. When I told my classmates about the gift, they were totally amazed and appreciated you for sending
such
 an expensive and excellent present. They
also
 want to
meat
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meet
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 you via social media. I'm trying to arrange a party in your honour soon and inviting all my friends and class fellows. I'll send you the link, please join us. I want to introduce you to my local friends
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 because they waiting for
this
 moment for a long ago. Take care. Yours Sincerely, Kunwar
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Structure
Make sure each paragraph focuses on a single idea for clearer communication. For instance, the paragraph discussing the wristwatch could be solely about your appreciation for the watch, separating thoughts on arranging a party for a different section.
Grammar
Review your text for minor grammatical errors and typos to enhance clarity and professionalism. Phrases like 'it's surprsing for me' could be adjusted to 'it was surprising to me'.
Closing
Consider adding a brief closing statement to wrap up your letter more smoothly, expressing a final note of thanks or anticipation for the planned party.
Expression
You effectively expressed your feelings and appreciation for the gift, which meets the task goal of thanking your friend.
Structure
The structure of your letter, with distinct sections for each of the required points, helped in maintaining a good flow and made your appreciation clear.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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