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Nowadays, some parents pressure their children to be successful. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or negative development?

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In recent times, some children have been placed under pressure to become successful individuals by their parents.
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 is because parents want their children to have an easier
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 than theirs and
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 want to
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 off to others.
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, in my opinion,
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 is a negative development as the children are made to choose a
career
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 against their wish. One of the main reasons why parents insist that their children should be successful is to make sure their children have an easy
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.
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 is mostly the case when the parents had a very hard
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 or have experienced a lot of tough situations in
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. In order to prevent the same thing from happening to their offspring, they insist that the children should study subjects that they think would make them successful in
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, a road-side food seller could want her child to be a successful tech guru. Another factor might be the parent's desire to
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 off. All parents want to be able to proudly
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 their children's achievements and success to others. For some to be able to do
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, they force their children to choose a
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 that they think is prestigious, a
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 the children might not have passion for. To illustrate, a child may want a
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 as an artist or a poet, but his parent would want him to be a neurosurgeon, as to them
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career
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 provide a successful future. In my opinion, parents pressurising the children to have a successful
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 has negative impacts on the children.
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 and foremost, the children are made to study subjects that do not interest them and have a
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 in something they do not have passion for.
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,
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 could cause job dissatisfaction and lead to them resenting their jobs, as they were not allowed to follow their desires
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.
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, the children would not be self- motivated. Their source of motivation would be the fear of disappointing their parents. In conclusion, some parents put pressure on their children because they want them to be successful.
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 may be because the parents want to be able to
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 their successful children off and
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 want their children to have an easy
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.
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 reason can be understandable, but have negative impacts on the children.

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