Some people say the main way to be happy in life is to have a lot of money. How might having a lot of money make people happy? What other things in life can make people happy?

Its
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It's
better to cry in a Mercedes than living happily without it. With
advancement
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the advancement
of technologies and more source of
investement
the act of investing; laying out money or capital in an enterprise with the expectation of profit
investment
, people
tends
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tend
to have a knack for
materialistics
marked by materialism
materialistic
materialists
facilities and luxuries.
This
leads to the saying of money is the only way to happiness.
Nowadays with
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Nowadays, with
enourmous upgradation
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the enormous upgradation
enormous upgradation
of technologies
,
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,
few sections of people
tends
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tend
to have a slight inclination towards
materialistics
marked by materialism
materialistic
happiness. Social
medias
a means or instrumentality for storing or communicating information
media
, peer pressure are some of the examples which made common masses believe that there cannot be
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
source of happiness except monetary.It may give us a thought why few sections of people believes that monetary satisfaction is the ultimate one. I feel that its due to plethora of new sources of financial investments that allures us to look forward a
luxorious
displaying luxury and furnishing gratification to the senses
luxurious
and satisfying life. Perhaps, huge amount of money may give us a sense of security in later stages of life so that one can spend the rest of their lives independently. Masses from the middle strata or lower strata of the society raised in childhood in hunger and financial crisis. It is quite normal to run behind
money which
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money, which
may give them and their family to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
their daily needs. Happiness is a state of mind and it differs from person to person. Some people are not happy after earning
crores
while some
remains
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remain
satisfied by dedicating their lives for the sake of common people. In our lives of daily grinding and running in a rat race, it is more important to achieve peace and contentment which may give us the naked source of being happy. Other than
this
I would like to add that contribute to social
cause be
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cause, be
it helping unfortunates, providing hand to have a clean environment and society for us and others to live. Several yogis, saints are
in
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at
peace with normal and simplified living.
Its
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It's
upto
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up to
us what we want to choose in our life.
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