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Some people think that the media such as newspaper should be allowed to publish information of people’s private life. Others however, think that there should be controls to stop this media from publishing this kind of information. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays,
privacy
 invasion by journalists is increasingly a debatable and controversial issue.
Invasion
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The invasion
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 of
people’s
privacy
 by journalists is a debatable and controversial issue. Some people think it is a welcome development,
while
 others do not.
This
 essay will discuss both sides of the argument and provide evidence
why
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of why
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people’s
privacy
 should be respected. Undoubtedly, there are some benefits of the traditional
media
 in invading
people’s
privacy
.
Firstly
,
this
information
 could be published to expose the ills in
the
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apply
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society
such
 as corruption and crimes etc.
For example
, an aspiring politician who had raped a woman in the past but wants to contest for an elective position.
The
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They
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has
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have
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 a duty to expose
such
 hidden
information
 to alert the general public about the character of the person they would want to vote for.
In addition
, the print
media
 could contribute
in
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to
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 holding government and public
office holders
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officeholders
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 accountable.
For instance
, a public
office holder
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officeholder
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 that engages in extramarital affairs should be exposed.
Nevertheless
,
they
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there
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 are many drawbacks in invading
people’s
privacy
.
Firstly
, some
media
 companies can become overzealous and
throwaway
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throw away
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 the ethics of their profession to
dustbin
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the dustbin
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 in their quest for
breaking
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break
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new
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news
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 thereby invading
people’s
privacy
 at will.
For instance
, the Duchess of Sussex, Meghan Markel’s
privacy
 was invaded by a
media
 company.
This
 company hired a helicopter and took unauthorized photographs of the Duchess in her bedroom and published
in
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them in
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 their newspaper.
Furthermore
, some
media
 outlets can become corrupt and begin to accept
bribe
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bribes
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to publish false
information
 about
people’s
 private
life
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lives
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, just to tarnish their image and possibly destroy their
career
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careers
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.
For example
, a United Kingdom-based newspaper published
a false
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false information
a piece of false information
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information
 about the First Lady of the United States of America, Melania Trump. She sued the newspaper and won. Imagine a situation where she was not capable or in a position to seek redress in
the
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a
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 court of law,
such
 publication could have tarnished her image and assassinated her character. In conclusion, I believe the
risk
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risks
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 associated with invading
people’s
privacy
such
 as bribery and
and
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character assassination far outweigh its
benefit
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benefits
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 like fighting corruption and holding public
officer
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officers
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 accountable.
Therefore
, there should be
controlled
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control
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 in
such
publication
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publications
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.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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