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Recently published figures show that the wildlife population around the world has decreased by around fifty percent over the last fifty years. What can we do to help protect the wildlife round the world?

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Over the
last
 fifty years, the
wildlife
 population across the globe has reduced by
half which
Accept comma addition
half, which
 has been evidenced by the recent studies.
Wildlife
 is a vital element of the world
for
Suggestion
of
 a balanced ecosystem.
This
 essay will discuss the methods that can help in protecting the
wildlife
Suggestion
Wildlife
 around the world.
Firstly
, countries should impose stricter rules and regulations against hunting and killing of wild animals. Wild animals are mainly killed for their fur, skin and tusks by poachers, which is sold in the black market for huge sums of money. Implementation of stringent laws against the killing of wild animals could help in reducing
such
 incidents.
For example
, in my country, India, killing wild animals is considered to be a criminal case and one can be tried in the court, the verdict of which is extensive fines and imprisonment for more than a year.
Additionally
, governments should implement laws against deforestation, as destroying the natural habitat of animals have an adverse effect on the life span.
Secondly
, spreading awareness amongst ourselves is another method which could help in preventing the decline of wild animals. With the advancement in
media
Suggestion
the media
 and advertisements, governments must run campaigns educating people on the importance of wild animals for a balanced ecosystem.
For example
, my community organizes periodic seminars on world environmental issues, in which the preservation of
wildlife
 is discussed extensively. Social media
such
 as Facebook and Twitter can be used as a tool to spread
such
 information and messages to educate mass populations on the importance of preserving the
wildlife
. In conclusion, just as humans, wild animals form an integral part of the ecosystem and it is our responsibility to ensure these animals are left unhurt and to implement measures
such
 as strict laws and spreading awareness to preserve their lives.
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