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More and more wild animals are on the verge of extinction and others are on the endangered list. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this problem?

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Owing to human activities, many species of wild animals are struggling to survive.
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 had driven many of them to the verge of
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 and others are on the endangered list. There are several reasons for
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. On the bright side, there are
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 certain measures that we can take to resolve
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 problem. The main cause of
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 of the wild animals is
deforestation which
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deforestation, which
 is done to facilitate the expansion and development of urban areas. Due to
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, wild animals lose their natural habitat and
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 puts their lives at risk. Many of them are forced to wander into villages for food.
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, since they pose a threat to people’s lives and property, they are often killed. Excessive poaching is another reason for the
extinction
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 of many wild animals. They are killed
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 the production of luxury goods
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 as leather bags, shoes and fur coats. There are several measures that the government and the public can take to undo the damage done to wildlife.
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 and foremost, the government should launch nationwide campaigns to sensitise people about the importance of conserving wildlife.
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, there should be strict laws to prevent poaching. The media and the activists can
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 contribute their bit. They should discourage people from buying products made of animal skin or fur. To conclude, human activities
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 as deforestation and mindless hunting are the major reasons for the
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 of wildlife. By enacting strict laws that stop or at least reduce deforestation and poaching, wild animals can be saved from the brink of
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