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The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words

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Since their invention by the end of the 19th century, the
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 and the number of cars on the roads have increased tremendously in Britain as well as other countries. It is true that cars have made travelling easier, but they have disastrous consequences for nature and mankind.
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, I agree with the argument that public measures
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 as enhancing other forms of transport and passing international laws should be taken to reduce the negative impact of cars. The negative impact of abusive
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 is evident.
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 of all there is pollution, partly induced by cars. It causes acid rains which destroy forest and water. Chronic respiratory diseases
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 as asthma and COPD are enhanced by pollution. But even cardiovascular diseases and mortality are largely aggravated by bad air quality. It is well known that in days of smog the mortality due to cardiovascular accidents rises in all the big cities. The abusive
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 contributes to the irreplaceable depletion of natural resources. Burning fuel warms up the atmosphere and weather condition will become more and more extreme. The overall
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 of cars has changed our lifestyle. We sit more and exercise less.
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 results in bad health conditions. There are solutions. Governments must encourage alternative forms of transport.
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 can be done in various ways. Cities must be changed. The
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 within town centres can be limited, the number of bicycle ways increased, green areas extended and the public transport improved. The
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 sharing services should be encouraged.
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 can be done with financial incentives. The problems linked to abusive
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 as air pollution and resource consumption have become global problems.
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, I believe they must be addressed on an international level as well.
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, we need laws in order to limit CO emission. Based on what I explained above, I think that abusive
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 has disastrous consequences for nature and mankind. Solutions exist and must be implemented,
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 locally, but eventually at the international level.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reliance on
  • regulate
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • public health
  • sustainable development
  • alternative forms of transport
  • car ownership
  • balancing benefits and drawbacks
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