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Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind, such as reading and doing word puzzles. Other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time. Discuss two views and give your opinion.

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In today’s modern world, life has become too hectic. Everybody is working hard to earn more and more money and to be successful in life.
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 exerts pressure on our
mind
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 and
thus
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 leisure
time
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 is essential. While some people are of the opinion that
activities
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the activities
 that sharpens the
mind
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 should be an integral part of our past
time
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, I
on the other hand
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 agrees with those who believes that the
time
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 should just be utilised to relax the
mind
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. Every individual has its own way of relaxing their
mind
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 in their free
time
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 and it depends on the place and
job
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the job
 they do.
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, people who
work
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 outdoors or do physical
work
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 prefers to do activities indoors like watching television, surfing the internet etc.
On the other
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hand those
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hand, those
 who have sedentary
jobs
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jobs, for
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, computer programmer or an administrator would rather go out for running or swimming in free
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.
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, different people need different type of activities to relax their minds and body. Some minds recover from stress by listening to music or watching TV while others relax by keeping their
mind
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 active and sharp like by solving puzzles
,
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 playing Sudoku. Basically, there
is
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are
 no hard and fast rules to give rest to our minds. Eventually, it can be concluded that any activity
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 different from our daily routine
work
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 and is not bound by
time
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 and space should be part of our leisure
time
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. The main aim should be just to relieve and rejuvenate the
mind
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 by any means so
that is
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 fresh and fit to
work
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 another day.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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