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some people think that the government should take care of disadvantaged people such as the unemployed and the homeless. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #government #care
It is often argued that homeless and unemployed should be taken
care
 by
government
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the government
 while others believe disadvantaged people is not
government’s responsibility
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the government’s responsibility
. I completely disagree with
this
 and Here I Show how it is. In my opinion, homeless people
has
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have
 equal rights to be taken
care
 by
government
 as others do.They have right to live in a society with respect. It is
government
’s responsibility to
care
 of each and every
person
 be it employed or unemployed or a homeless
person
.
Firstly
, I would like to talk about if a
person
 is out of
job
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a job
 or homeless it is not his or her fault.
Infact
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In fact
government
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the government
 should never see
a
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an
 advantageous side.
Furthermore
, a homeless
person
are
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is
 from
poor family
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a poor family
poor families
 and
government
 should
infact
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in fact
 take more
care
 of these people.
Mostly
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Most
 homeless people are senior citizens as young people
now a days
the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech
nowadays
 don’t like to live with their parents. As they think
their
in or at that place
there
 is a huge difference in their mentality and ability of thinking. To conclude, It is
government responsibility
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a government responsibility
 to
care
 of each
person whether
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person, whether
emoloyed
having your services engaged for; or having a job especially one that pays wages or a salary
employed
 or unemployed or a homeless
person
.
Government
 is accountable for each and every
person
.

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