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In many countries, people are moving away from rural areas and towards urban areas. Why do you think that is? What problems can this cause?

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The migration tendency of people has diversified. The population of various nations
are moving
Suggestion
is moving
 into metropolitan places from rural areas.
This
 essay will provide some reasons as to why
this
 is happening and present some problems that it can cause.
To begin
 with, the trend of
masses
(Old Testament) the Hebrew prophet who led the Israelites from Egypt across the Red sea on a journey known as the Exodus; Moses received the Ten Commandments from God on Mount Sinai
Moses
 to give preference to live in the developed areas
instead
 of sub-urban places is to fetch a better job in an advanced city.
For instance
, if a resident of a high class city is unsuccessful to land a job in his state because the opportunity was given to an individual of developing area
than
subsequently or soon afterward (often used as sentence connectors)
then
 it will make the population of urban place unemployed.
Thus
, a Country should try to improve the livability conditions in a
second
 tier State by planting more financial resources which can improve the gloomy tendency.
In addition
, the people may want to lead a fast paced lifestyle which may be a driving concern to opt for an advanced city.
However
, if all the subjects of a Country start
to live
Suggestion
live
 in the most sophisticated places of their nation than it would be difficult for the persons to survive in
such
 a place as many things would get scarce like housing and other public utilities.
Therefore
, an equal distribution of the population among the wealthy and poor areas is ideal. To conclude, to live either in a rural or
a
Suggestion
an
 urban place is a personal choice,
however
, keen efforts should be taken by the respective governments to provide the same standard of living to their masses irrespective of their jurisdiction of residence.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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