In some areas of the US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?

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Various conflicts are going around the world

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due to which government of many countries

impose

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imposes

sactions

give sanction to

sanctions

on people for their safety.Some people think that government imposed

sactions

give sanction to

sanctions

on young people after dawn is acceptable.

However

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disagree the above

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disagree with the above

line of thought

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and

belive

accept as true; take to be true

believe

that infringes the right of

freedom

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and better police protection during nights will solve the problem.

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with

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young people should not be bound by

restriction

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the restriction

.Our forefathers have fought long battles so that everyone would live a free life

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If there is no

freedom

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then

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the person will not develop into a mature and fearless

beingand

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being and

perhaps may be

aggresive

having or showing determination and energetic pursuit of your ends

aggressive

to society.To illustrate

this

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many convicts who have been booked for petty crimes, after serving in confinement become more

aggresive

having or showing determination and energetic pursuit of your ends

aggressive

and commit more

henious

extremely wicked, deeply criminal

heinous

crimes later on.

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, it is necessary for teens to be given their own

freedom

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Furthermore

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People of young ages

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particulary

to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common

particularly

teens are adventurous in

nature

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nature, hence

hence

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will venture out at night without permission of their

gaurdains

a plot of ground where plants are cultivated

gardens

guardians

garden

.Our modern society should understand their nature and should have tight patrols in nights for their protection

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since there might be some time that a kid would be in

unfavorable situation

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unfavourable situations

unfavourable situation

an unfavourable situation

For example

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one of my cousin's

kid

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kids

went out at night for a party with his friend

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but while coming back to

home

that male; objective male pronoun

him

he fell into a ditch.Since his leg got hurt, he could not

comeout

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come out

but

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But

fortunately a patrolling policeman heard his cry and saved him from

ditch

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the ditch

a ditch

.So, it is necessary to have proper police protection

inspite

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in spite

curfew

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the curfew

. In a nutshell

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a curfew is not needed in

developed

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developing

society

such

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as America.To encourage maturity and fearlessness young ones should be given

freedom

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toexplore

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to explore

and enjoy their lives.And for their

proctection

the activity of protecting someone or something

protection

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a proper police function at nights is required.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

283 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

enforce
juvenile
repercussions
autonomy
adolescence
paternalistic
delinquency
municipality
ordinance
authoritarian
peer pressure
social dynamics
civil liberties
community policing
preventative measures

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