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Some believe that people who do physical work should be paid on par with people who have a high-level degree. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued by some people that both skilled and unskilled workers should be paid the same wages regardless of their level of education. In my opinion, I completely disagree with
this
 notion for a number of reasons.
To begin
 with, educated workers cannot receive the same salary as menial workers because of the time and money invested in attaining a degree.
This
 is because lots of funds and sacrifices go into schooling, and one way that an individual can be rewarded is with good pay.
Moreover
, it will be baseless for one to go to school for close to five years, graduate and be offered the same salary grade as a high school drop-out who does not see the need for learning in school. To illustrate, the average Nigerian youth spends nothing less than six million Naira to see themselves through university. It is
therefore
 expected for them to earn higher than their counterparts who have never seen the four walls of a university.
Furthermore
, right from inception, a more educated worker collects more money than a person doing a menial job.
This
 is because a skilled worker is more involved in administrative work and
also
 life-changing decisions at work, unlike a cleaner whose work might be to keep the office clean.
As a result
 of the more technical level of expertise required by a skilled person, it is,
therefore
, necessary that he gets a pay commensurate to his job.
Also
, these sets of jobs are in different classes,
consequently
, should not in any way be compared. In conclusion, there is no basis for comparison between unskilled and skilled workers because of the level of expertise required by the highly skilled individual.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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