Now people spend less and less time at home. What are the causes? What are the effects on individual and society?

#people #time #home #effects #society

this

generation nowadays many people are not spending quality

time

with their beloved family members due to their work schedules and same

time

busy with social media like Facebook

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Instragram. In

this

essay will discuss all the negative effects impacted on

personal life

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the personal life

personal lives

and society.

Firstly

, In the

globalization many

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globalization, many

people are working in different

timezones

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time zones

for job and same

time

they have a

dreams

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dream

to grow as manager and other bigger positions

therefore are

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therefore is

mostely

in large part; mainly or chiefly

mostly

busy with office

work

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work, hence

hence

they don't spend

valueable

having great material or monetary value especially for use or exchange

valuable

time

with family members

forthis

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for this

issue divorce

cases

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case

are

increasred

made greater in size or amount or degree

increased

because no one

speding

the act of spending or disbursing money

spending

personal life with

partner

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a partner

and

completly

to a complete degree or to the full or entire extent

completely

forget about relationships.

For Example

In USA 30% divorce cases

are increased

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increase

in lot one year due to no

co-ordination

the skillful and effective interaction of movements

coordination

between wife and husband and same

time

these cases

are coming

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come

have come

before their

fisrt

preceding all others in time or space or degree

first

fist

anniversiry

the date on which an event occurred in some previous year (or the celebration of it)

anniversary

Secondly

Now a days

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Nowadays

young people are busy with social media like Facebook and Instragram

becuase

for the reason that; on account of

because

all the closed members are spending very less

time

in home henceforth they are easily attracted to

internet

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the internet

and they are easily learning

unwated

not wanted; not needed

unwanted

things like criminal activities like using drugs and drinking and making new relationship with unknown persons

therefore

it's automatically effected to

nation

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the nation

because of crime rate increasing and nation growth.

For Example

in developing countries like Brazil and India the new

crimal

someone who has committed a crime or has been legally convicted of a crime

criminal

crime

activities are increased like online

frund

a person you know well and regard with affection and trust

friend

friends

ground

and most of the

this

gangs

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gang

are

below

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under

25 years age. In conclusion, In

this

generation many people are spending very less

time

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home their fore it's

distubing

causing distress or worry or anxiety

disturbing

family life and increased divorce cases in many nations and same

time

due no eye on

kids they

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the kids, they

the kids they

are moving

crimal

someone who has committed a crime or has been legally convicted of a crime

criminal

activities like

drungs

a substance that is used as a medicine or narcotic

drugs

and drinkings using internet

hence

it's effected to the society.

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In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message? ive reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own nowledge or experience.

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Rich countries should not employ skilled labour from poor countries, as poor countries need the worker more. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Many people believe that education and high qualification will bring success. Others think that it is not required to achieve success in life. Discuss both views and give your opinion.