Now people spend less and less time at home. What are the causes? What are the effects on individual and society?

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generation nowadays many people are not spending quality

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with their beloved family members due to their work schedules and same

time

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busy with social media like Facebook

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essay will discuss all the negative effects impacted on

personal life

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the personal life

personal lives

and society.

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globalization many

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globalization, many

people are working in different

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time zones

for job and same

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they have a

dreams

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dream

to grow as manager and other bigger positions

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therefore are

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therefore is

mostely

in large part; mainly or chiefly

mostly

busy with office

work

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work, hence

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they don't spend

valueable

having great material or monetary value especially for use or exchange

valuable

time

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with family members

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for this

issue divorce

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case

are

increasred

made greater in size or amount or degree

increased

because no one

speding

the act of spending or disbursing money

spending

personal life with

partner

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a partner

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completly

to a complete degree or to the full or entire extent

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forget about relationships.

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In USA 30% divorce cases

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increase

in lot one year due to no

co-ordination

the skillful and effective interaction of movements

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between wife and husband and same

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these cases

are coming

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come

have come

before their

fisrt

preceding all others in time or space or degree

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fist

anniversiry

the date on which an event occurred in some previous year (or the celebration of it)

anniversary

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Now a days

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Nowadays

young people are busy with social media like Facebook and Instragram

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for the reason that; on account of

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all the closed members are spending very less

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in home henceforth they are easily attracted to

internet

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the internet

and they are easily learning

unwated

not wanted; not needed

unwanted

things like criminal activities like using drugs and drinking and making new relationship with unknown persons

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it's automatically effected to

nation

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the nation

because of crime rate increasing and nation growth.

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in developing countries like Brazil and India the new

crimal

someone who has committed a crime or has been legally convicted of a crime

criminal

crime

activities are increased like online

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a person you know well and regard with affection and trust

friend

friends

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gangs

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gang

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under

25 years age. In conclusion, In

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generation many people are spending very less

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home their fore it's

distubing

causing distress or worry or anxiety

disturbing

family life and increased divorce cases in many nations and same

time

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due no eye on

kids they

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the kids, they

the kids they

are moving

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someone who has committed a crime or has been legally convicted of a crime

criminal

activities like

drungs

a substance that is used as a medicine or narcotic

drugs

and drinkings using internet

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it's effected to the society.

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Now people spend less and less time at home. What are the causes? What are the effects on individual and society?

Fully explain your ideas

The government’s investment in arts, music and theater is a waste of money. Government should invest these funds in public services instead. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

The increasing availability of low-cost airlines now lets people travel around the world. Some feel this is a positive development while others think it is negative overall. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

Crime is a big problem in the world; many believe that nothing can be done to prevent it. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your own opinion.

celebrities say media interfere in their private moments while some say that they must face this due to their popularity. do you agree or disagree?

4.Many young people leave school with a negative attitude toward learning. What are the possible reasons for this? Suggest some solutions to address this problem.