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In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of taking a gap year before starting university

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About education, every c
ountries
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country
h
ave
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has
their own customs. In some countries, parents often encourage their children g
o
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to go
t
raveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
after finishing high school;
however
, some prefer their children keep studying. Let’s see w
hat’s
what thing
what
the advantages and disadvantages for y
oungers
used of the younger of two persons of the same name especially used to distinguish a son from his father
younger
to do. If people choose to work or travel after graduating from high school, they may probably know more about the society or
this
 world. For working people, they can start e
aring
earn on some commercial or business transaction; earn as salary or wages
earning
earn
money and raise their families. Their economy can b
e independent which
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be independent, which
means they can decide the way to deal with their salary by themselves.
Also
, they can save money as the fee to go to university. As for those who choose to go t
raveling,
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 they can meet many strangers and view lots of beautiful scenes on the way they travel. What difficulties they meet in travel can make them become stronger.
However
, if they w
ant to go university,
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want to go to university
 after working or t
raveling,
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 they may forget some knowledges and their classmates.
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