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Violence in the media promote violent in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#violence #media #society
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Broadcasting violent content over the media leads to
promotion
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the promotion
 of
violence
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 among people.
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 essay totally agrees with
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 statement because brutal videos telecasted have a negative impact on the young minds and terror outfits use social media to promote hatred among people. Young children, on an average, spend around 5-6 hours of time watching videos over television,
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 as movies or cartoons. Most of the movies today have some form of physical
violence
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 like, a brutal murder, communal riots and rape.
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, these young ones are exposed to crime and brutality at a very young age and start believing that it is alright to resort to
violence
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, if the need arises.
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 can be illustrated by an increase in the number of incidences of physical abuse among school children. Recently, a sixth class student studying in a very reputed school in Mumbai murdered his junior because the
later
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latter
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 did not give him the seat in
school bus
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a school bus
.
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, many terror groups utilize the social media to float videos of mass killings, people getting slaughtered in the name of religion with a motive to create unrest among the people and divide them based on religion. They mislead
public
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the public
 by showing
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 content and encourage to join hands with them.
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, one of the most dreaded terror
outfits
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outfit
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ISIS, targets people from
Muslim community
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the Muslim community
Muslim communities
 and instills ill will in their minds for other religions and motivates them to get indulged in violent activities. In conclusion, media exposes young children to barbarity at a very tender age and
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also helps
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also help
 in spreading communal
violence
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