Violence in the media promote violent in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Broadcasting violent content over the media leads to
promotion
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the promotion
of
violence
among people.
This
essay totally agrees with
this
statement because brutal videos telecasted have a negative impact on the young minds and terror outfits use social media to promote hatred among people. Young children, on an average, spend around 5-6 hours of time watching videos over television,
such
as movies or cartoons. Most of the movies today have some form of physical
violence
like, a brutal murder, communal riots and rape.
As a result
, these young ones are exposed to crime and brutality at a very young age and start believing that it is alright to resort to
violence
, if the need arises.
This
can be illustrated by an increase in the number of incidences of physical abuse among school children. Recently, a sixth class student studying in a very reputed school in Mumbai murdered his junior because the
later
referring to the second of two things or persons mentioned (or the last one or ones of several)
latter
letter
did not give him the seat in
school bus
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a school bus
.
Furthermore
, many terror groups utilize the social media to float videos of mass killings, people getting slaughtered in the name of religion with a motive to create unrest among the people and divide them based on religion. They mislead
public
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the public
by showing
this
content and encourage to join hands with them.
For instance
, one of the most dreaded terror
outfits
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outfit
,
Accept space
,
ISIS, targets people from
Muslim community
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the Muslim community
Muslim communities
and instills ill will in their minds for other religions and motivates them to get indulged in violent activities. In conclusion, media exposes young children to barbarity at a very tender age and
also helps
Suggestion
also help
in spreading communal
violence
.

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