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Hosting international sporting competitions is good.but few people think this causes too many problems. explain both views and tell your opinion.

#competitions #people
The graph illustrates the
percentage
 of
households
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household's
accommodation
 both owned and rented in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Between
year
 1918 and 2011, the
number
 of households in rented
accommodation
 decreased dramatically.
On the other hand
, the
number
 of
owned
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owning
accommodation
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accommodations
 rocketed in these years. Surprisingly, the
percentage
 of households
ijln
 owned and rented
accommodation
 were same in
year
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the year
 1971 with a
percentage
 of 50%. In
year
 1918 the rented
accommodation
 in England and Wales
was
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were
 approximately 78% and the
number
 of owned
accommodation
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accommodations
 was roughly over 20%.But in
year
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the year
 1939 and 1953 proportion of both owned and rented
accommodation
 didn't move as they were about 68% and 32% respectively. The
number
 of
owned
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owning
accommodation
 increased day by day until
year
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the year
 2011 whereas it decreased merely 4%.
In contrast
, the
percentage
 of rented
accommodation
 kept
decreasing but
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decreasing, but
 a sharp increment was noticed
(
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(
about 3%) in
year
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the year
 2011.

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