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Some people believe that it is good idea to express the point of view and ideas through social media however other believe opposite do you agree or disagree

#people #idea #point #media
Due to the rapid development of technology, we can
share
 each and
every thing
all things
everything
 through the
medium
 of the
internet
.Now days
,
Accept space
,
everyone is busy in the
internet
.Through the
medium
 of
internet people
Suggestion
the internet people
 are using social sites and updating their daily activities.Some people think that it is
good idea
Suggestion
a good idea
 to express the point of view and ideas through social media yes,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 agree with
this
 because sharing
every thing
all things
everything
 face to face is difficult and
internet
 is
easy
Suggestion
the easiest
medium
 for everyone to
share
 happiness
,
Accept space
,
joys and sadness.
on
Suggestion
On
 the one hand
,
Accept space
,
through the
medium
 of the
internet
 world has become a global village where humankinds can
share
 each and every thing
in
Suggestion
on
 the
internet
.Because of the
internet
 we can transform important messages from one corner of
world
Suggestion
the world
 to another corner.Scientist and government are publishing important messages
,
Accept space
,
rules and regulations through the
medium
 of
internet
 so in one point it is saving time and money too. Despite
this
,
Accept space
,
people can
share
 their problems and can solve problem
in
Suggestion
on
 the
internet
 only so it has played a huge role
for
Suggestion
in
 the development of the country.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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