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Some people think that public libraries are no longer important, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #libraries
Although
 It is believed by some that public libraries are of no importance anymore, other people do not agree with
this
 assertion. I,
however think
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however, think
 that these
librabries
a building that houses a collection of books and other materials
libraries
 are no longer vital. On the
one
 hand, there has been a decline in the number of visits to the
library
 because of the advancing role of technology in making data research more accessible and easy.
In other words
,
as a result
 of technological evolution, people can now use the internet to source for
information
 without any hassle.
Also
 with the use of
this
 web,
one
 can have access to a vast number of educational websites at the touch of a
button unlike
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button, unlike
 the
library
 where
one
 has to walk around going through stacks of books which might be obsolete.
For example
,
one
 can now get numerous data about any subject from websites like yahoo,
wikipedia
a web-based encyclopedia with content contributed by volunteers; most articles can be edited by anyone
Wikipedia
, drug.
com
Suggestion
Come
Con
Com
 without stress. I believe
this
 school of thought is right because
information
 gotten from libraries might be out of date and can affect a learner's performance.
On the other hand
, it is thought that public libraries are still vital because it is unaffected by limitation of technology and
also
 books in the
library
 contain original contents.
Firstly
, books in the
library
 are not affected by situations like poor internet access or power outage which might be the case when computers are used in place of the traditional libraries.
Futhermore
in addition
Furthermore
, in
other
(often plural) a command given by a superior (e.g., a military or law enforcement officer) that must be obeyed
order
 to prevent getting adulterated
information
, it is important that these places remain
opened
Suggestion
open
.
This
 is because some
information
 sourced from the internet might be incorrect or even false. To conclude, while people may vary in their opinions, I believe that the public libraries are no longer as vital as they used to because of the advent of technology.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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