IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6.5

Some people think that public libraries are no longer important, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #libraries
Public libraries used to be the treasure house of knowledge and
information but
Accept comma addition
information, but
 according to some people in
this
 age of the
internet
 they are of no importance. Of course, many people disagree with
this
 view. In my opinion, state funded libraries certainly have become less important than they used to be;
however
, I cannot support the argument that they are no longer important. The
internet
 has made state run libraries less important. These days, if you have a device like a smart phone or a computer and an
internet
 connection, you can find up to date
information
 on any topic in a fraction of seconds. Actually, finding
information
 online is a whole lot easier than going to a library and reading voluminous books. Thanks to the search function of the
internet
, we do not have to turn over pages after pages to find what we want. We just need to type in our query and we get the answer instantly. Needless to say, people who have constant access to the
internet
 no longer visit libraries.
On the other hand
, public libraries still serve some valuable purpose. To start with, the
information
 on the
internet
 is relatively new whereas libraries have an impressive collection of old manuscripts that are not available online.
Also
, much of the
information
 online is in
English whereas
Accept comma addition
English, whereas
 libraries have a huge collection of books written in a wide variety of languages. What’s more, libraries only keep the best reference books on a topic;
by contrast
,
information
 found online can be unreliable or false because there is no one to check the veracity of data posted online. For
this
 reason, libraries are still the best source of
information
 for research scholars. Libraries
also
 provide a quiet environment where students can read without facing any distractions. In conclusion, there is no denying the fact that public libraries have lost some of their importance. Even so, they are still needed because
information
 stored in a library
is
Suggestion
has been
is being
 always reliable and accurate.
Also
, libraries have old books and manuscripts that are not available online.
Submitted by Mabel on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: