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You are organising a local committee meeting. You would like a local MP to attend the meeting to contribute to a discussion about green areas in the community. Write a letter of invitation to the MP's secretary, Mrs Shelton. In your letter -introduce your committee -say why you are having the meeting -invite the MP to attend

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Dear Mrs Shelton, I am writing
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 letter to introduce my committee and make an invitation to the local Member of Parliament to show up at our event. My name is Bella, and I am the co-founder and general manager of the local green organization. Currently, there are 159 members on our committee which is aiming to redevelop forests and wetlands in the countryside of our city, Newcastle. On the first Saturday of the next month, which is the 5th of May, we are going to hold a campaign, which not only involves the introductions of the programs that have been being conducted by our members but
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 promotes the awareness of the protection of the environment, at the local hotel. I would be extremely grateful if the local MP would be able to attend
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 conference. If he simply doesn’t have time to take part in
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 event, I completely understand as I know how busy he is.
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, if he shows up, I just wonder whether he can make a speech regarding the importance of environmental preservation, which will be one of the highlights of
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 event I believe. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Please let me know whether a local MP will join us on that day. Yours sincerely, Bella Liu

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Task achievement
To further improve your writing, consider adding more detailed information about the specific outcomes you hope the MP's participation will bring, and perhaps provide more details about the event's agenda to make it even more persuasive.
Coherence and cohesion
Using a variety of cohesive devices and paragraphing can enhance the readability of your letter. While your letter is well-structured, incorporating a wider range of linkers and transition words could further improve the flow of information.
Task achievement
You excellently introduced your committee and clearly stated the purpose of the meeting, which aligns well with the task requirements.
Coherence and cohesion
Your paragraphs are well-organized, each focusing on a specific point, which aids in keeping the letter coherent and easy to follow.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • local committee
  • contribute
  • green areas
  • community development
  • sustainable practices
  • influence
  • presence
  • venue
  • confidential confirmation
  • dialogue
  • mission
  • vision
  • stewardship
  • environmental conservation
  • commitment
  • collaboration
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