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Some students work while studying. This often results in lack of time for education and constantly feeling under pressure. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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Education plays an important role in everyone's life and
hence
 most parents are given enough
time
 to their child and pay attention to their
study
 growth, but some students cannot do the same due to their financial condition. Some students are now working while they are studying to support their
study
. Those who are earning while they are getting educated, are not able to spend
time
 for their
study
 due to lack of
time
, which result into create a situation and students feel pressure to perform well in less
time
. Each one should have different aims behind to earn money while
study
, one could help himself to pay off their school expenses whereas
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
 can do
this
 just for an experience. The Same way some are
work
Suggestion
working
 for extra income. But in most of the cases pupils are doing jobs to earn and spend
those
denotes a person or thing
this
 money on their
study
. The government is working on
this
 situation and helping students by providing free education to them who are economically backward. I would suggest to charity institutes and NGO's to come forward and give their helping hands to bring them up by sponsoring a child's educational expenses. I strongly believe that if we all together make an effort will definitely change the scenario.

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