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In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this

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People in few countries have
this
 perception that if students are directed, to spend their
time
 in doing some jobs or travel the world, before getting into the
college
, after high school. It would be beneficial for the students to make them refresh after schooling, but
this
 long
time
gap
 from studies could make them feel not concentrated, while studying. After attending schools and studying in an extensive manner till the high school, could cause some disturbance in the student's mind. It requires some kind of break, to rejuvenate all the energy.
Also
, if you
work
 somewhere, you get to interact with some new people and by doing
this
, you
also
 learn about social behaviour. It has been analysed that the
college
 students who
work
 before getting admission in the
college
, do well in the
college
 in their academics. So, it could we a better idea to take a free
time
 and do some
work
 and may be travel around the world, to make yourself fresh for the
next
.
Although
 there are some merits of taking a break before the
college
, It could cost the student in a very problematic way. Students could loss their focus after
such
 a long
gap
, some
college
 does not take students who generally have one or two years of
gap
. There has been some incidents recorded by a survey group in Delhi that more than 200 students did not get into the
college
 due to a year
gap
. Some students were not even able to finish their graduation in a given amount of
time
, due to lack of concentration. In conclusion,
Although
 there has been some disadvantages of taking a break after the high school, a number of advantages of it is more than its demerits. So, In my opinion, If someone is taking a
gap
 before the
college
, it would be a great decision taken by him and his family to make himself learn more about the life by travelling the world and by doing some
work
.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
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