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Some people think that the development of technology helps to reduce crime, while other people think it encourages crime. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. devlpt of techno reduces crime Devlpt of techn encourages crime

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The role of
technology
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 in our everyday lives cannot be overemphasized. It is believed by people that technological development has helped to limit criminal offences, others think that
technology
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 promotes these crimes. In my opinion, I believe that advanced
technology
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 has
indeed aided a
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indeed aided
decrease in
crime
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 levels drastically. On the one hand, I believe that
technology
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 has played a big role in reducing
crime
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 because of the fear it imposes in the hearts of potential criminals. In a country where these technological tools are being used, criminals are on the low because they know that the machine can easily detect them.
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, ever since the Nigerian government installed a surveillance camera on the road, the
rate
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 of road robbery drastically reduced.
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 goes to show how effective
technology
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 is in curbing
crime
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.
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, it is thought that
technology
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 has increased
crime
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rate
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 because of the vast sources of information available online to criminals. In the past, before a
crime
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 is committed, it could take years of planning by the perpetrators but now crimes can be committed easily by just a tap of a button even without the perpetrator leaving his position.
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, ever since you
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created, the
rate
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 of
crime
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 has increased in the US.
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 is because of the limitless unfiltered information on the internet shared by people. In conclusion,
although
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 the
crime
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rate
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 has increased because of the huge amount of information present on the internet, I believe that the fear imposed by technological tools hav
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