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life was better when technology was simpler. To what do you agree and disagree?

#life #technology
It is
agrued
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argued
agreed
 that our lives were more
fullfilling
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fulfilling
 when technology was less complex.
This
 essay completely disagrees with
this
 statement because I believe modern technology saves our
time
 and
also
 helps in education. Smartphones and
iphone
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iPhone
 have made our lives much less laborious and given us more free
time
.
This
 is to say that jobs that required lots of energy and
time
 can now be done at the touch of a button.
Moreover
, we
dont
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don't
 need to write
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an
for
a for
 example, in the past
time
, people had to write a letter and take it to the post office, and
then
 wait for it to be delivered but nowadays we can send a message on the wats app or on
facebook
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messgenger
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messenger
 within seconds. The internet has
also
 enriched our lives by assisting us in education and has made us more effective and independent learners. In the past, students had to rely on teachers if they had any problem in studies but nowadays pupils can search for any information on the internet.
For example
, Chegg Study is a free online tutoring site for students to help them with their school homework. In the conclusion,
this
 essay suggests that life has been greatly improved by technological advancements, [particularly labour-saving phones and the learning opportunities provided by the internet.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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