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Some countries import a large amount of food from other parts of the world.is this positive or negative trend?

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In today's modern world, many countries are preferred to importing the meal than produce. Because it is more effective than producing
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 as the climate of the country is different and they choose to import.
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, imported food often travels for days,weeks or even months. And it reduces the freshness and nutritional value, maybe the meal would be treated with chemicals which have an effect on human health.
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, the cost of overseas meals is too high for local
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.
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, local product production may be damaged.
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 will lead to job losses in farming communities.
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, in Australia, the quality of unemployment has increased by 5% compared to
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 year because the country imported more foreign
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 and the need for local production decreased.
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, importing
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 has a lot of positive sites
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 as increased variety of foods, and year-round availability. Foods that are seasonal locally
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 as fruits and vegetables can be imported from other hot countries and it will be cheaper with low production costs. Leading to more affordable prices for
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.
Consumers
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 gain access to a wide variety of
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 including exotic fruits, spices and specialty foods that are not locally grown. A bright example of
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 my niece who tastes dragon fruit
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 not produced in our country but we can taste it if we want.she was very surprised when she tasted
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 fruit after that we bought
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 fruit every week. In conclusion, importing food has a lot of beneficial sites for
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 and sellers A wide range of food invites
consumers
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