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You are going to study in a college in the UK next year. You would like to stay in a college Hall of Residence. Write a letter to the college. In your letter explain your accommodation requirements explain what your food needs are ask what alternatives are available if they cannot provide what you want You should You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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I am writing to inquire about accommodation options in the
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 Hall of Residence for the upcoming academic year, as I will be studying at your
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 starting next year. I would greatly appreciate your assistance in arranging suitable living arrangements. Regarding my accommodation requirements, I would prefer a single room with a private bathroom, as I value privacy and personal space.
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, I would like to be in a quiet area of the hall, as I need a peaceful environment to focus on my studies. If possible, I would
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 prefer a room with good natural light and access to common areas where I can socialize with other students. As for my food needs, I follow a vegetarian diet and require meals that are free from meat and fish. I would
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 appreciate it if the
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 could provide options for dairy-free and gluten-free meals, as I have some dietary restrictions. If the Hall of Residence cannot accommodate my specific requirements, could you please let me know what alternative options are available?
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, are there other housing facilities nearby that the
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 recommends, or could you provide guidance on finding private accommodation? Thank you for your time and assistance. I look forward to your response. Yours faithfully, [Your Name] New chat

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Consider adding a closing statement that emphasizes your eagerness for a prompt response, which may enhance your overall letter.
coherence and cohesion
While your paragraphs are generally focused, ensure that each paragraph flows seamlessly into the next for even better coherence.
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The tone of the letter is polite and formal, which is appropriate for the context.
coherence and cohesion
Your accommodation and dietary needs are clearly outlined, making it easy for the recipient to understand your requirements.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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