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Families who do not send their children to government-financed schools should not be required to pay taxes that support universal education._ *You should write at least 250 words.* Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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More often than not, in developed countries, parents are choosing to send their children  to self funded schools. While some critics argue that
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 parents should be evicted from paying taxes that are used to fund
government
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 schools, I strongly believe that all citizens should contribute to public
education
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 through taxation, even though they might not benefit from it directly.
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 with, funds are required for adequate running of
government
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 schools and ensure that every child has access to basic
education
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.
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, if the
government
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 lacks appropriate fund by giving some parents waivers not to pay taxes, the
government
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 schools will have to shut down.
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, less children will have the opportunity to be educated, because not all families can afford to send their children to private schools, which makes its important for everyone to pay taxes.
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, a large population of every society attend
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 schools and the entire society benefits when the majority of its populace is educated. In Britain,
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, most of the citizens are literates, because they have access to free
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 from grade 1 to high school,
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, they are able to contribute to the growth of the economy. Most high school graduates often work during their gap year at retail stores before continuing their
education
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 or sometimes work part time while studying at the university.
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 has made a significant positive impact on the British economy. In conclusion, it is a clear fact that
government
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 funded schools makes a huge impact in educating a large number of its citizens and contributing to the economic growth, which means that all families should be required to pay taxes that contributes to the funding of
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 academic institution regardless of where they choose to send their children to learn.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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