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Question- Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is often said that, Museums are the only best place to
visit
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 there. In my opinion, It is a good step to charge the
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 fees for people. In the following passage I will illustrate that why it has more advantages to charge the fees for the visitors.
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 with, Museums play a vital role in the economy of the any country. Museums are the only place where people always
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, especially the outsider visitors or foreigner visitors. If everyone pays the
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 fees so the government will get a lot of income from the museums.
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, these revenue governments can utilize somewhere else.
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, health, education, infrastructure and many more other sectors. Along with
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 these revenues can be spent on the museums staff salary.
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, There are some disadvantages as well, Nowdays, most of the people have free time especially old age people. They usually choose those places where there are no
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 fees, especially shopping mall, parks, seasides and playground. They did not
visit
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 to museums because of the
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 fees. If there are no fees for the museums, they will definitely prefer to
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 there as well. To sum up, I strongly encourage the government body to impose the admission fees
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 the museums and
aslo
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 foster the international visitors to see the museums so through
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 way the
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the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
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 will generate the revenue from the people and these
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monies
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 can utilize some other field for the betterment of the citizens.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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