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In some parts of the world it is becoming popular to research the history of one’s own family. Why might people want to do this? Is it a positive or negative development?

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Exploring
one’s
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 family background and
history
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 is becoming increasingly popular in numerous countries around the world. In my opinion, through research and knowing more about
one’s
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 family,
people
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 can see common trends passed through
generations
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 and useful information which can only be seen as beneficial for
people
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’s future.
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, some
people
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 look into their family
history
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 in order to discover any common trends with family members of a previous generation.
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 can be especially so with
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 who have particular skills, gifts or interests in uncommon fields.
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, as some gifts and skills are hereditary, it can be interesting for
people
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 to learn how many others in their family shared these talents from previous
generations
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. Another reason for the popularity of finding out about
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 family
history
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 is often
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 general curiosity
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one’s
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 geographical origins.
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 to say, some families moved abroad, away from their own country,
generations
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 ago which resulted in them losing their original culture and adopting the culture of the country they moved to.
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, through research,
people
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 can learn more about their country of origin and understand more about the culture that their family originally came from.
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, the trend of researching family
history
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 is certainly beneficial and can help
people
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 find their place in the world. Some
people
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 feel a lack of direction in life or are dislocated from others but by learning more about their past family
history
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, it can help them relate to the world and feel more comfortable about who they are. Take,
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, a person who feels nervous about making a certain choice in life, they may feel comforted by knowing that others in their family made the same choice many
generations
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 ago. In conclusion, it can be advantageous for
people
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 to learn more about the family’s background and origins. It would be useful for children to learn about their own family
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 if
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 was incorporated into the school curriculum.
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